Haha, well thank you for the compliments! I am honestly intrigued by the thought of a grunt version of 091, so feel free to create away! Unfortunately, since I'm back at college and pretty occupied with writing, I don't know if I'll be able to contribute much, but definitely proceed without me. As for the easter egg, I think that is INDEED quite interesting, as his armor matches up pretty much exactly with 091's... I wonder what Bungie's explanation of it will be... Best of luck to you in your endeavor, and regards!
Haha, well, the thought had occurred to me that, if he were to die in combat, that he should be killed by 091 himself... a bit of irony. As for the personality, I don't know. I've never seen a very serious or dedicated Grunt, hahaha. But hell, I'm sure you can pull it off if anyone can!
Well, I've looked it over and have thought of some points that stood out for me.
First, I strongly recommend that you change his name. While I know that Grunt names are harder to come up with than many other Covie names, but "Honcha" looks a bit too much like "Honcho". This may be a matter of personal taste, but it's pretty distracting for the reader.
Secondly, I'd go through the article and change most of the smaller numbers (I'd shoot for below 100) from your numbered format (9, 10, 15, etc.) to word form (nine, ten, fifteen, etc.) This is a pet peeve of mine that shows up in a lot of articles and really depreciates how the rest of the writing looks at first glance.
Overall, this is a great character concept. While I'm not 100% on board with the concept of Sangheili literally using Grunts for slave labor, it still makes for a compelling backstory and origin. I would suggest that you run through the text a few times for proofreading before you right anymore. Some of the words you use are a bit too informal for an article and could use some revising.
A bit of advice for current and future plans for the character: spend a lot of time with his personality. You've given him a defining characteristic in his naive nature and you should expand on this more in both his history and his personality sections. Why is he so naive? One might think that going through all the abuse he endures from very early on in his life might harden him and make him cynical, so you need to provide some more reasons for why his reacts to his ordeals the way he does. But not only do you need to have that one defining characteristic, you should also bolster it with less important ones as well. People may be defined by a few traits, but everyone's got their own unique set of habits and mannerism that define how they go about their daily lives. This is one of the hardest parts of creating a compelling character, but if you get it right you'll be able to come up with plenty more interesting details to add to his history.
Hope this helped you out some. I'd stick with this article if I were you, it has the potential to be really good if you invest enough time and effort in it.
I agree with Actene on most issues, but the name isn't much of an issue for me. I agree that it doesn't sound very Unggoy, but that isn't an issue for me - Unggoy can speak human languages, and I kind of like the idea of one taking a human word out of context as their nickname, and it eventually sticking. Perhaps his file called him "head honcho", mispronouncing the word, and ending up with Honcha? Over time, he keeps the name as a reminder of long-gone comrades killed in battle out of sentimentality. It provides an explanation for a very un-Unggoy name, as well as fleshing out his character, killing two birds with one stone!
Otherwise, I love the article! It gives a nice sense of the desperation the Unggoy must feel in their position, and illustrates their life in a way I haven't seen here yet. This is how I imagined the life of an Unggoy to be, and it's nicely conveyed!
I have very few plans for that era. It's mostly a work of Sith'ari, actually, though of course I'm excited to hear any good ideas! I'm still wrapping my head around the Grunts as a galactic superpower, but I think it has merit, and it allows us to give the Grunts what they've wanted for centuries - payback.
I have Watchmen as well, and loved it's deconstruction of the superhero myth - I haven't had the opportunity to actually read the comic yet, but from what I hear it cuts a little out but largely remains faithful. I prefer to view it in its own right, as an awesome movie.
No problem, hope my advice helps you build up the article more! Just remember that one of the keys to writing a good article is proofreading--often several times more than once. Just grab five minutes or so here and there to read through a section in the article, see how you think of the writing/content, and make whatever changes you deem necessary. With enough polishing like that, you should have a possible GA or Annual Award contender on your hands.
It reminds me of a quote from War of the Worlds: "It never was a war, any more than there's war between man and ants." Though obviously with a very different meaning. During this point in time, the UEG is led by Secretary General Pierre Plantard, though perhaps he could retire and his successor deliver the speech. I'm a little wary of the cultural intermingling of human and Unggoy, though it has of course happened so very often in our own species' history without conquest - the Romans were invited in by the ruling British tribes, and if not for a few brutal acts of stupidity Boudicca may have been quite a happy ally, rather than a famous enemy of Rome. With such close ties to the humanity securing their independence from Sangheili/Jiralhanae/Prophet overlordship, I would imagine the Orion Arm would settle into a routine of peace and prosperity.
And then the Dark Ones arrive, bringing fire and death to races so close to real peace. Nice!
As for what the "big thing" is, I would imagine that the Spartans and the myths that surround them, even after Reach proved their mortality, would be more than sufficient as a human deterrent against the Unggoy. ANd if not, I'm sure Sith'ari could dream up a superweapon that I have to wonder what the Unggoy would have up their sleeve - perhaps a Forerunner weapon dug up from Balaho? Dreadnoughts captured from the New Covenant? Sheer weight of numbers? I'm recommending that Sith'ari and I adopt it, possibly with a few small modifications to places and times, but in otherwise mostly untouched form.
In general, the Spartans are still around. There's still Gamma Company, plus whatever other supersoldier projects the UNSC has going. Many of the younger Spartans are killed during the War of Vengeance and Second Great Wars, and are deployed on covert missions during the UNSC-USE Cold War. They're not disbanded, decommissioned or replaced - they're valuable operators, still the best of the best. VOLSUNG/TROJAN-type warfighters become more standard as the improvements are introduced into wider service, drastically improving human effectiveness, but there will always be a place for Spartans, whatever shape or form they come in.
Or did you mean specific teams? I know that Baselard and Kukri are going to be active long after GW2, and that I have a spectacular finish planned eventually for Indigo, passing the torch to Fauchard Team.
I'm sure some would resent the UNSC, especially after hearing about something like Project CHISEL, and others would be on their own, working for their own ends - allied to DRACULA, and whoever takes his place afterwards. If there is an afterwards. The Spartans themselves seem utterly loyal to the UNSC, and know perfectly well that it has its dark side - I'm impressed with Halsey's attitude to "indoctrination", preferring to allow the candidates to choose to remain with the program, convincing them of the project's aims and motivations. I hope that it's something that the III program continued, or else the UNSC is going to have a lot of people unhappy at a sudden peace with the things that killed their families.
I imagine the Insurrection wouldn't take too long to crop up again - opportunism is the defining trait of humanity, for better or worse. And if any former special forces have a vendetta against Earth-based rule, they'd probably be welcomed with open arms. But in the wake of a devastating war, I think most, including (especially) the supersoldiers would know that weakening the UNSC is just inviting trouble.
Edit: Oh, and once Losing Hope finishes, I hope to return to VORAUSSICHT. The short (?) hiatus has given me an opportunity for brainstorming, and I have a couple of interesting ideas that still need work.
It's an interesting idea, certainly, and a New Sparta would certainly be an incredible superpower, but I don't think it works that way in the Labyrinthverse. The idea of VORAUSSICHT is not that superhumans are being created, but that humanity itself is on the verge of a major shift - cultural, scientific, and genetic. The Spartans aren't brothers of humanity - they're its sons and daughters. DRACULA and OZYMANDIAS, and even SHOGUN in his own way, are all uncovering or creating projects that will (or are designed to, at least) catapult humanity into a new renaissance. With this next phase in human development, pioneered by underhanded dealings and stolen knowledge, humanity will eventually become what their predecessor race aspired and failed to be, a true guardian of life. The only thing that is holding them back is time, and their lack of it - their wars against the Blood Covenant, then the Governors of Contrition, and then their frantic defence against the apocalyptic wrath of the Sovereigns. It is at this point that they begin their true rise. Eventually, the Assembly may become akin to a New Domain. I don't have any plans to continue expanding after GW3 - I just can't see that far ahead - but it's what I expect to happen in the canon future anyway, so hey, might as well get in on the action while it's still to be had!
The Spartans aren't a means to an end, or even an end, my friend. They're just the beginning. And they of all people know this better than anyone.
Clearly he must have been irritable, swore like a sailor (or a Kiwi), was faux Goffic, and picked on twelve year old vampiric females because he's just a douchebag. His non-Prophet name would be Ahl Behrt. And then Snape was Vlodemort!
I'd say that it would be very interesting, but very work intensive. I'm not getting any updates on anything up as it is - doing this would be awesome, but I'm afraid I just don't have the time anymore. I'm really sorry about that - I'd love to do it, and had some ideas, but its just beyond my means right now.
Since you're one of the people that helped spark my thoughts on Unggoy reproduction, care to give feedback on that section of my Reproduction article? (since it's the only one up and running so far...)
It's awesome to know I'm not offending someone! :P
I've read a few of her stories (not all of them though, I have some real life stuff I really should be getting through) and they're extremely good! Is she not active here because she's more involved in the DeviantArt community, or does she just not want to get that involved? I'm sure she'd be very welcome here!
Edit: Also, would you consider passing along a story of my own? I'm curious what she would think of it.
SilvaRex — You ask me a question, I give you an answer. If you don't like the answer I give you, then that's your problem, not mine.
Such a shame. My old school simply blocked the site - there were ways around it, which people I knew regularly abused for far less, shall we say, savoury purposes, but I never figured it out. Thankfully, the Student Union for Uni has a lot of clout - not that I should be using Uni computers for this, but oh well. I'd be very interested on her opinion of it!
I like them! I like the desperate and pointless attempt of a neo-Koslovic to reason with the woman who has him pinned down, and I like the story of an abandoned Unggoy. The latter is a bit short, though, and there's some small grammar errors in the former, but that's the only negative criticism I have. Otherwise, I liked them!
I love the picture, but I'm having a hard time figuring out who everyone is... The links to the people you describe are all linking back to your userpage lol... Maybe fix that, but on the whole... Love it!
Hey man, did you create this image, or borrow it from Halopedia? The customizable fields thing is really neat, and would you allow me to fill out the fields and use my variant for my own use? I would really appreciate it.
...the great Specops rose from the dead, hauled the boulder from the cave mouth, and staggered down from the hill into the nearby town, moaning and hungering for brains.
In seriousness, I don't think I'll be able to do anything more than scripting, if I get involved in it. I have a video editing program, but I'm going to be busy with a journalism piece, two seminars, essays and projects, and so on, not to mention I want to finish off my Xenomorph fanfic, finish VORAUSSICHT, and then continue a Doctor Who fic I started. This is the busy part of the semester for me.
I think the image is awesome, and I loved the review - I agreed on all the major reviews, especially on the retcon regarding the Elites - I hadn't really thought about it before, but it absolutely makes sense, if the alternative is Grunts and Jackals kicking our collective asses.
I know, I know. I think I'll try searching for a film of the final grunt rather than unlocking in myself. I've always had trouble with that level, and I'm not sure why. I'll see if I can do that tonight, but it would be easier to do it tomorrow instead. I apologize for the delays. »§-Beware, The DemonsBring Automatic Weapons-§« 22:40, October 19, 2011 (UTC)
Glad you liked my little short story thing, but I believe you mentioned something about an image? Did I make an ass of myself and forget a picture request? If so, tell me and I'll rectify that bit right quick!
Sorry about that there delay, I drifted in and out of activity for a while there and guess I totally lost your request. Anyway, here yah go! I couldn't get exact versions of each image because the Grunts were proving uncooperative, but I did my best. If you got any more requests, shoot me a message.
Oh, and since you commented on the summary of it, I'm gonna make a shameless plug and ask you to drop some constructive criticism or comments on Beta Red.
Sorry about the image, I tried a few times to get it, but never did, then forgot for a while. It's not the easiest screenshot to get! I started the screenshot service-thing when I was playing Halo all the time, but soon after I got sucked into Gears 3, so it became harder to find time for screenshots. But if you still need that pic, I'll still try to get it, though I probably won't have it ready for a little while. »§-Beware, The DemonsBring Automatic Weapons-§« 23:57, November 12, 2011 (UTC)
Thank you for point that out but I already know that it doesn't make a lot of sense. However I couldn't come up with another way for him to do it, considering they are in a dark and dirty alleyway in the middle of the city it doesn't leave a lot of room for ideas. But if you have any suggestions I will gladly take them. I'm glad people like this so far, I've been slightly worried about the quality because I'm working on multiple projects at once. It's been hard to manage them all because I can only work on one for so long before my mind starts to deviate from it.
You seem helpful! And one of your sigs has an animated .gif!
You see, I am going to create an expansion of Deep Winter, the AI that helped train Beta and Gamma Companies. And while searching for images, I came across a blog with the most interesting .gif seen here. I sent him an email, and he has graciously allowed me to use the image. However, I find when I try to shrink the image down to fit a typical 300-350 pixel infobox, it looses the flickering awesome. Do you know how I can keep the flickering awesome without having it dominate the entire page?
Season Four of Survival of the Fittest will be starting up soon, and YOU are invited to submit your characters to participate! All you have to do is submit your characters, then sit back and watch as the bloodbath commences. Will your character rise to the top of the heap to claim ultimate victory, or will its mangled corpse become just another character's stepping stone to glory?
If you need any further details or clarification, just visit my talk page and give me a shout. May the best character win!
Merkenary|text=Oh sorry, I was uploading a few images and didn't pay attention, I'll be sure to check in future, I'm new to wikia. I realized it was a grunt pic when I posted it on a page, so I re-uploaded it, but it must have changed later on.
So I was cruising through TV Tropes earlier, seeing if I could find out some info and stuff, and ended up in the area for potential future tropes. While I was there, I ran into this one about an anti-climax death for BA characters, and right when I was about to post about Kat's death.... I saw I was beaten to the punch. But I wasn't just beaten to the punch. I was beaten to the punch... by YOU! LOL, just thought I'd share
I like it so far, but just some feedback on issues that are mainly my fault because I haven't clarified things clearly, or at all.
The Jiralhanae at this point are no longer part of the Covenant and technically don't have client races any more. However, they do make extensive use of warrior-slaves, which given her lowly position would actually be ideal. Feel free to throw some Sangheili, humans and perhaps Jiralhanae too if you want (I imagine a big angry male slave could make an interesting dynamic, though its just a suggestion, don't feel you have to take it if it would ruin the balance of your pack
I didn't make a clear definition of what a Retinue is. A retinue is a group of sidekick characters that support the main character. They're distinct and different from military forces under their command. There's a list of ideas for retinue characters on the page for starting points on her first retainer. As a major, she'd have access to a single retinue character. She still has her team though.
Otherwise, I'm liking it! Will she be part of a larger faction, or do you plan on allying her with somebody? I imagine she's going to try and put all those acumen points to good use.
As far as I understood in, I thought Brutes ate/hunted/talked about eating anything and everything because they're predatory dicks, and not in the sense of they hang around schools with long coats. I do like the Brute hunger idea though, perhaps it can be a genetic condition that effects a small, but still prevalent faction of the population? It would certainly be an interesting vice option.
Dear God, your userpage is a mess! You might really want to consider cleaning it up sometime.
looking for writing work, if you need any help or want to expand an idea id love to help i have a little writing exp you can check it out on my page thx.
Unlawfulspartan (talk) 03:08, April 26, 2013 (UTC)