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| I think your opening image could be stronger, although I tend to dally along in so many adjectives I make run-on sentences in some of my prose, by using more specific detail to give a few particular defining traits and some particular feeling to it. I also wish Rojas got just a few lines more of development, stringing the audience along to believe he'd be a pain-in-the-side arrogant character or have an ongoing purpose in the story just before, well, y'know. I like what I'm seeing so far, and I'm believing the camaraderie between the squad members, so I may be checking back on this just as periodically as you make updates.
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