Talk: Colt Blaster HDW Mk.15

Sev40 - On the blood of our fathers, on the blood of our sons, we swore to uphold the Covenant: TALK - 15:56, Sunday, May 7th 2017 (Australian Eastern Standard Time) Hey mate. The image you're using for this article, as well as the fact that it's derived from the AR-15, is in conflict with the site's WW2Halo policy, which states that you cannot use pictures of guns from the 21st century and prior. You'll need to find another gun image to use, sorry. And to stop that scrolling error, just get rid of the space in front of the quote. Also, I'd recommend you use this nicer-looking template for quotes.

S-D379 - "Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising every time we fall.": TALK - 10:02, May 8, 2017 (UTC). Today is Friday, April 19, 2024 Since you asked for some feedback, I'm gonna list out any things I find to be, err... wrong. Buckle up:- I'm not exactly sure what you mean by 'various manufacturers'; if you're saying that it was remade by many for their personal uses, I'd suggest you to first add a manufacturer name, then additionally write the sentence that it was later remade by various unnamed industries. If it's something else, then do clarify about it In the model part, you should write Mark 15, instead of that quote. In the functionality section, I think the first five small paragraphs could be combined into two larger ones, making it more convenient to read and also looking good. Also, "across the galaxy" should be better changed to "across the human-controlled space", since humans haven't yet explored the entire galaxy. This one is just a suggestion, and you can have it however you want. Sixth paragraph of 'Functionality', the "C" in "Contact" shouldn't be capitalized. Nice to see that you've described the Covenant as a "mega-theocracy", but it could be made better by making it "alien mega-theocracy" The 'Plasma-tipped' ammunition makes no sense. You see, the Covenant guns don't use ammo tipped with plasma(?), they generate plasma blasts by superheating or some method I don't know of, but a human weapon wouldn't be able to chamber plasma rounds or anything like that. If you wanted to extend its lifetime use, you could say that new modifications were made, which allowed newer ammunition types and brought this weapon back. Again in the design improvements section, you should join those two-sentence paragraphs into bigger ones. I don't think if its predecessor would be ruled out in the 21st century itself, this weapon would stay until the 26th. You should say something nearer to the 23rd century. Oh wait, you just mentioned "ancestor", my bad. Still, the paragraph makes it seem more like "predecessor" Again with the plasma-tipped rounds. They aren't possible, so you should remove them, or describe in a way that makes them possible. The Great Schism took place at the end of the HCW, not during the Post-War years. The image you're using now still does look modern, but since it's a very old weapon and used by civilians, I guess it's okay. However, if any admin suggests you change it, then you'll have to use a weapon more, 26th-century UNSC-ey. Other than all these, the article is really a good one for a user's first article, far better than mine, if I say so. You've done a great job so far. Keep working, and it might just win the Good Article status. All the best! Cheers!