Talk: Good Articles/Nomination/Archive 5

Davenport Security Services, Inc.

• Writer — FightWithHonor
• Nominator — Lordofmonsterisland
• Date of Creation — December 31, 2008
• Date of Nomination — July 25, 2014
• Description — A PMC founded at the turn of the 25th century, detailing their activities through the next century and a half as they survived two wars and dealt with the fallout.
• Why — It's always been said that we lack a lot of the old articles in the GA category, so when I stumbled across this during the clean-up project I figured I'd throw it out there. We only have a few good corporation articles on the site, this potentially being one of them, so I believe it would add a little to the diversity.
• Status — Nomination failed.

Voting

1. Oppose — I would almost be in support of this, but there's just a few too many little things adding up that hold it back for me yet. For one, I'd remove that introduction header so the intro sits above the Table of Contents like it should, and it needs at least one more image to meet requirements, and while it just barely squeezes over the minimum length threshold, I'd feel a lot more comfortable supporting it if there was a bit more content. If that last point was the only thing holding it back, however, I'd be fine supporting it, as the article's grammar and spelling all seems to be up to par. A few missed s's and a period in one of the quotes, but if someone could get ahold of FWH after so long, I think it'd be a worthy addition to the GA ranks. That Damn Sniper 01:03, July 26, 2014 (UTC)
2. Oppose — I agree. There are a few easily-fixed problems that could really improve the quality of this article, but at this point it needs some work to qualify for GA. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Oppose — Lack of an introduction means it's inadmissable for GA, which is a shame, because it is a good article, while not meeting the standards required by this panel. I doubt there's much chance of FWH returning but should he do so, a little effort and this can gain Good Article status that it deserves. StoneGhost - talk | contribs | email | articles

Kafkian Uprising

• Writer — Chakravartin
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — December 1st, 2013
• Date of Nomination — July 26th, 2014
• Description — An event article detailing the causes and course of an uprising on a colony after the Human-Covenant War's end.
• Why — The article is incredibly thorough in explaining the background and causes of the uprising. Factors from the colony's place in the UEG to corruption in the colonial government conspire to make the rebellion, when it breaks out, seem as though it were an inevitability.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — There are still a couple things I'd like to see, mainly a proofread by the author because there were some places I wasn't sure enough about when I went over it to be confident in changing, but the eye-catching unusual format, amount of content, and use of images puts it at the GA level for me already. That Damn Sniper 04:09, July 27, 2014 (UTC)
2. Support — As per Ahalosniper. A great article overall that I've read through a couple of times in the past. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Support — Chak has gone to obvious and extreme effort to make this fanon event as believable and detailed as possible, and it really shows, exhibiting detail you'd expect of a real-life event and not cutting corners when it comes to explaining why each faction does what it does. A personal favourite of mine and definitely deserving of GA recognition. StoneGhost - talk | contribs | email | articles
4. Support — As per the others. This was a great article to watch grow and develop while it was being written. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Colin-142

• Writer — Lieutenant Davis
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — Month Day, Year
• Date of Nomination — July 26th, 2014
• Description — One of the newer generation of SPARTAN-II flagships.
• Why — There are some points in the article which could be improved, such as seemingly contradictory personality traits in the introduction, but Davis has incorporated plenty of media (some custom-edited), been careful about his spelling and grammar, and as a result of collaborating with other users has had to be very mindful of canon, creating an article that abides by the rules of the Halo universe.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination. That Damn Sniper 04:09, July 27, 2014 (UTC)
2. Support — There's been a great deal of hard work and effort put into creating this character since it was made. This greenish-blue Spartan is a good choice for GA. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Ash Mitchell

• Writer — Brodie-001
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — September 29th, 2012
• Date of Nomination — September 9th, 2014
• Description — A Sigmaverse ODST who goes from trooper to merc to Magnus' unwilling partner to a member of the Dynasty’s crew.
• Why — Mitchell's been one of the Sigmaverse's more prominent characters through RPs like Awakening Demons and Draco III, community projects like Vae Victus and SotF, and featuring in Sigmaverse stories like Sanctuary and Mercy Kill. He was created originally just for AD, and has gone on to play a surprisingly large role, if the length of his biography is anything to go by. But then, just about every character and their dog has a history longer than some other EUs in the Sigmaverse.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination. That Damn Sniper 00:50, September 10, 2014 (UTC)
2. Support — Ash Mitchell is probably my favorite Sigmaverse character. This fallen hero (my favorite kind) is a testament to the everlasting ODST potential for badassery. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Support — A long-time favourite of mine from Brodie's character collection. I've immensely enjoyed RPing with Mitchell which furthers the depth on his character from what I read in his article.
   Sonasaurus | Talk • Contribs

UNSC Dash

• Writer — Leo Fox
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — February 14th, 2014
• Date of Nomination — September 9th, 2014
• Description — A storied UNSC vessel with an engine that runs with about one-fifth less heat.
• Why — There are only a few users that do long ship articles, but those few have honed their art. The technology incorporated in the ship is thoroughly explained, the history's been run through in detail, and even has the super-ultra-extreme-awesomazing references format seen on Vulpine. I was a little surprised this was the ship out of Leo's many to get this much content on its page, but hey, I guess the reference that started the page was what's given him the energy to go so far on it.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination.
2. Support — I may not be a great writer of ships like Leo, but I really love the sheer amount of work that's gone into this one. Certainly deserving of the award. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Support — Meticulously crafted and storied, this is a shoo-in for GA status. Ship articles have been a bit of a dying breed on the site as of late, so it's good to see that some users are still interested in writing for them. Actene: Heaven and Earth
4. Support — I remember when Leo first made this article, I wasn't sure if it was meant to be a joke or not. But upon its expansion, I think I have the answer. I'm glad to see that he's still as enthusiastic about writing ships as ever. Sonasaurus | Talk • Contribs

Tal 'Zerex

• Writer — The Pale Kestrl
• Nominator — The Pale Kestrl
• Date of Creation — April 21, 2013
• Date of Nomination — 10 5, 2014
• Description — The tale of a disgraced Sangheili warrior who leads a violent life across the lawless galactic frontier. A legend born of blood, the saga of this cybernetic enhanced sangheili see's him crave a grim legend into the galactic criminal psyche before becoming the victim of his own sins and finally finding a new calling with a certain spaceships crew.
• Why — Since I first created Tal all that time ago, for the Hammer Fall RP, he has grown to become one of my favourite characters. Not just because I poured so much effort into him so far, having gone through at least three complete rewrites and countless rewrites of plot lines, but because (among my plethora of kind hearted super soldiers, including characters not on this site) he is mostly unique. I know he still has a ways to go but I feel like he deserves an award, if for nothing else than being such a fun character to work with.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — - Aye. The article's been a heck of a project for Kestrl to whip into shape over the last few months, and between its amount and quality of content, I think it's ready for GA. That Damn Sniper 03:24, October 9, 2014 (UTC)
2. Support — - Although this page's formatting has never been my favorite, that's an extremely minor complaint. The growth of Tal as a character and article has been a real chronicle to Kestrl's own growth and development as a writer and member of this community. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Support — Ahh, I remember when this article won the Fanon of the Month award in its humble beginnings. Now I can say that Kestrl has done a fantastic job of furthering its quality as an award-winning article in its own right. Sonasaurus | Talk • Contribs
4. Support — Kestrl's clearly put a lot of work into the article and has made a real effort to integrate him into not only his own universe but the wider community through RP's and the like. Certainly deserves the award. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

John-A222

• Writer — Warhead2220
• Nominator — Warhead2220
• Date of Creation — September 11, 2014
• Date of Nomination — October 11, 2014
• Description — An interesting description of a SPARTAN-III of Alpha Company including information about his deployments, team, and trivia. This SPARTAN is an respected Commander of the UNSC Navy that is regarded as a skilled and tactical leader.
• Why — I felt that this article was an effective way to organize and develop this SPARTAN as a character. The information and references in the article are accurate, and in my opinion, rather interesting. Research was done to ensure that the article does not interfere with canon and is as realistic as possible. Aspects from his combat history and preferred weapons to armor variants and personality are described. I have enjoyed developing this article and continue to formulate ideas where I say, "Ah, that would be great to include." Thank you for your consideration.
• Status — Nomination failed.

Voting

1. Oppose —Well, the article does meet length and image requirements, though the sheer number of links to Halo Nation kind of throw that off and make the article's byte length appear longer than it is. On one hand, I can kind of appreciate that it has the number of links that a canon site article would have, but I think the article could use a lot more content, perhaps in the Early Military Career section where things like the Sabre Program and ONI ops are hinted at, but not really explored. Furthermore, I would cut down on his Specialties. Having him excel in so many areas comes across as a bit too much praise for the character; I'd recommend choosing one or two at most, and since they're going to be in the Sabre Program, being a pilot should probably be one of them. Just think, it's an experimental program where he's going to be alongside some of the best pilots among other branches, aces who've survived in Longswords against superior Covenant Seraphs, and most of John's augmentations won't give him an edge over them in the cockpit. Instead, his intelligence and quick reflexes are going to be tested, which is something we don't see in Spartan articles as commonly as battle exploits that emphasize strength and fighting skill. Stories about fighter pilots in Halo are an opportunity people haven't used very often, and would be exciting to see. Additionally, I suggest you make use of Quote templates, which are free for anyone to use, and help give your quotes a uniform look, and take the "|thumb|" out of the infobox image, as that's what causes the little bit of green showing up at the top which shouldn't be there. One odd thing for me to fixate on is the second image you've used, which cuts a couple images together and must've taken quite some time and careful outline-cutting, when a screenshot of the same could be used. Would you like help with getting a screenshot of John on the turret? Because it could certainly be arranged if you were to ask. I also recommend using the Halopedia template instead of linking to Halo Nation, as Halopedia's the superior site. Lastly, I'd question his being a Commander, as it's a bit of a high rank for a Spartan, but I suppose he is leading a Noble-like team, so it's not unheard of. Well, that's certainly more feedback than I usually give. I may oppose the article for now, but you've been working on it in the background pretty diligently, and I think this is a good chance for you to step forward, get feedback, and be recognized by the community at large. I recommend joining the Irk sometime and get to talking with fellow writers and Halo fans - it's one of the best ways to get feedback. Best of luck. That Damn Sniper 04:11, October 13, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Thank you for your review and time. I have already begun to make modifications. I have implemented the quote template and have removed two of the specialties. I feel as though some explanation is due on my part regarding some of the other topics, mainly just to show my reasoning. Regarding the piloting references, I was not trying to establish the character as an ace or anything. I merely wanted to provide a background for why some piloting skill is present (similar to how Noble Six had piloting background). The number of links was just me making every attempt to provide reference and resemble a canon article. My reasoning for referencing Halo Nation was mainly because that site resembles this one a little more in format, coloration, etc, so I figured it would make the cross from here to canon a little more natural looking (but that was purely cosmetic). I am in the process converting to Halopedia. The rank is supposed to convey his skill and status as a squad leader as well as give another example of a high-ranking Spartan (given that there are about three canon Spartans who have risen to Commander or above yet there are supposed to be at least 1000 Spartans). While I completely understand your reasoning, this is just something I am a little persistent about. The second picture certainly is several images edited together (I guess it is bad that you could tell haha), but it isn't all that important to me. Once again, I would like to thank you for your feedback and vote. I am going to try to add more content and do my best to improve the article. Respectfully, Warhead2220 (talk) 22:07, October 14, 2014 (UTC)

Halo: Resurgence/An Act of Retribution

• Writer — StoneGhost
• Nominator — StoneGhost
• Date of Creation — January 18, 2014
• Date of Nomination — November 5, 2014
• Description — A man who is not necessarily evil commits an unforgivable, inexcusable crime.
• Why — I very rarely write stories because I am aware how painfully mediocre I am at it. I would very much like critical feedback, in the hope that I can improve.
• Status — GA status granted.

Voting

1. Support — To get preliminary checks out of the way, the article meets length requirements for a short story (even exceeds the old short story length requirement), and goes the extra distance by including a title image and music. Now, at the core of it, I suspect you want to know how you can improve your prose, but for my part, I think it reads fine. Maybe it's not the every-syllable-strikes-like-lightning gold, but it's good enough to read and be enjoyed. The only complaint I can raise about it is the paragraph starting with "Commander Marshall turned around." It's far too long, and covers a lot of details that read to me like the specs in a ship article. Both breaking it down and glossing over some description in favor of a few key details wouldn't go amiss. The only other note to make is I'm not sure you've got the year in your time template right; it reads in the 2600s, when in the story, Marshall talks about a first generation born without the threat of the Covenant War. Perhaps you meant 2562? Now, being that there's two components to a story as I see it, the prose and plot, we can get to the second. I enjoyed the hell out of the premise. The main character's committing an unspeakable act, but you were able to articulate his feelings and motivations well enough that I could understand where he was coming from and how a human being could make this decision. I was a bit surprised none of his bridge crew took physical action to stop him, but I was able to see in the scene the sort of herd mentality taking them over as Marshall swung them over to his side, offering them a way to escape blame and the like. So ultimately, I enjoyed the read and can't wait to see its GA standing granted. That Damn Sniper 13:15, November 6, 2014 (UTC)
2. Support — As per Sniper's nomination. Really enjoyed the story overall; definitely worthy of GA status. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Support — As per Sniper. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Chancer V

• Writer — Ahalosniper, Actene, and The Pale Kestrl
• Nominator — Leo Fox
• Date of Creation — December 14, 2013‎
• Date of Nomination — December 1, 2014
• Description — The Chancer V is a well storied, long lived and equally well-worn civilian transport vessel that is more than meets the eye, changing hands a number of times and surviving the Human-Covenant War. The Chancer V that is treated more as a member of Gavin's crew than being the ship that carries that crew.
• Why — Summing the Chancer V up as an article, it is a well-written article and an enjoyable read that is quite well fleshed out. The authors remain hard at work on it, and its clearly a contender for the 2014 HFFA Ship of the Year title.
• Status — Granted GA standing.

Voting

1. Support — An excellent article that has only improved with every new addition. Definitely one of my favourites on the site. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
2. Support — There's really nothing left to say that I haven't already said anywhere else. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Carlos Driscol

• Writer — Brodie-001
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — October 2nd, 2012
• Date of Nomination — January 5th, 2015
• Description — Despite being an embittered former UNSC soldier and Insurrectionist leader responsible for a great deal of the ongoing strife in the Sigmaverse, still a pretty cool guy.
• Why — Meets and far exceeds all expectations of a character article.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination. That Damn Sniper 02:18, January 6, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — We're eventually going to hit a point where just about all of Brodie's major Sigmaverse characters have been approved for GA status. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Support — So here's where I give my usual spiel about how awkward it is to vote on my own stuff, blah blah blah. I had fun writing Driscol because he's a horrible person, in addition to being yet another character originally conjured up for a one-bit part in a short story that ended up getting involved in about fifty other things as I expanded on his character. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

John-A222 (Renominated)

• Writer — Warhead2220
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — September 11, 2014
• Date of Nomination — January 21st, 2015
• Description — An interesting description of a SPARTAN-III of Alpha Company including information about his deployments, team, and trivia. This SPARTAN is an respected Commander of the UNSC Navy that is regarded as a skilled and tactical leader.
• Why — Renominated by virtue of its extensive rewrite by the author.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — Well, this nomination has hung out to dry for quite some time. While I agree with Sniper's above points and think the article still has a lot of room for improvement, I think that it has sufficiently improved to the point that it is worth GA status. Actene: Heaven and Earth
2. Support — Reading through it again, I agree with Actene. John has come a long way to be a pretty reasonable Spartan officer as the leader of a Noble-esque team, putting it at GA-quality. The only detail I'd nitpick is the idea in its first paragraph under Biography where it mentions his being of SPARTAN-II-like stock allows him to benefit more from the augmentations. I don't think it'd really work like that, seeing as the S-IIIs underwent CHRYSANTHEMUM augments, which were different from those of a II. Other than that, it has my complete support. That Damn Sniper 03:01, January 22, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — I agree with the others on this one. There's been a lot of effort put into this article since its previous nomination. Naturally it could do with a couple of tweaks as mentioned above, but it's otherwise a solid article that deserves GA status. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

DAB-101

• Writer - Dab1001
• Nominator - Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation - November 16, 2014
• Date of Nomination - January 25, 2015 (Indian Standard Time)
• Description - A page about an experimental SPARTAN-I and his adventures with the ODST Platoon named Task Force Bravo as they travel and fight the Covenant during their journeys.
• Why - It is a very well written article and has a good story of his life.
• Status - Nomination failed.

Voting

1. Oppose —This article's been a matter of some contention lately, and I know the author and his writing partners have put a lot of time and effort into the article's ideas, but I don't think it's a Good Article yet. It does include images and its headers are broken down and ordered properly, but my biggest issue with it is the article's length. At 17000 bytes, it exceeds the minimum requirements, but only just, especially when over 2000 bytes are in the infobox and its many links alone. In many sections under Biography, there are only a couple of small paragraphs to detail DAB's (which I can only assume is a codename still used because actual identity hasn't been revealed in your off-site RPs) actions, and the Personality and Relationships sections are essentially a barebones framework right now which contribute to the byte length without having much in the way of actual content. If more sections of the Bio were filled out with as much information as the Early Life and Insurrection header, I might be more inclined to support it. So, as it stands, though it meets minimum requirements, I would not yet qualify it as a Good Article. That Damn Sniper 06:42, January 26, 2015 (UTC)
2. Oppose — As per Sniper's comments. Just because the article has had the NCF tag removed doesn't mean it's immediately GA-worthy. There's plenty of sections that need some expanding. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Oppose — I have a lot of empathy for this article; it's been through a lot these past few weeks and with all the effort that has gone into making it succeed, I would very much like to see it be successful. Unfortunately, these sentiments do not negate the already mentioned criticisms and so I can't throw my support behind it yet. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Comments

Thank you for that, Sniper. I'm sure DAB will expand it. He still hasn't written the story of many RPs, but he will expand. I am sure. Thanks again. – Coolbuddy (talk • blogs) 08:46, January 26, 2015 (UTC)

Ryuko Kawada

• Writer — Ajax 013
• Nominator — Ajax 013
• Date of Creation — 2nd of July, 2014
• Date of Nomination — 26th of January
• Description — A gladiator fighting for her life in pits and arenas across the Galaxy, her story chronicles to ongoing struggle to break free of slavers, and her past.
• Why — Probably one of my finest articles in months, Ryuko is one of my more prolific articles, and one of the most rounded off articles.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — Normally, if I saw an article with a picture from Kill la Kill at the top I'd be reaching for the NCF stamp straight away. However, Ajax has put a truly herculean amount of work into creating Ryuko's backstory and explaining everything from her personality to her outlandish attire in great detail, and makes it work. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
2. Support — There's no question this article's had a lot of work put into it, heck, it's managed to make me take a character with that much midriff showing seriously, which is a feat in itself. And, in working with Ajax with the character in RPs and plots, I've been proud of the results myself. But this is Ajax we're talking about here, and as one of the site's oldest users, I want to push him just a bit more for a truly outstanding article before I give it the green light. The first and foremost improvement I'd like to see is a breaking down of the headers into sections and subsections, because as it stands everything under Bio is at an even level and hard to tell apart one era from another. Everything from Early Life to First Match could go under a header called "Early Life and Enslavement" or "Capture", while "Early Life" becomes "Childhood", the slew of Masters she has after could be a section, and everything to do with the Chancer V cross-over could be in an Uprising section of some sort. Second, the infobox could use a make-over, as it still lists just a fraction of her equipment and her affiliation with Calistus. The last is just that looking at her Armoury section in the table of contents makes it seem disproportionately large. Would you consider putting her many armors in a tabber in that section? Already, I think it stands at enough content with a high enough level of writing (though one more proof-reading for flow wouldn't go amiss) to be a Good Article, with one of the most senior users on the site, I want to hold him to a slightly higher standard and get something truly great out of it. That Damn Sniper 00:05, February 1, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — As per Brodie. We've got plenty of successful anime-inspired articles on this site--such a label applies to a good half of my work here--but I've always thought it dangerous to go "full anime." Somehow Ajax not only tried it anyway but also managed to pull it off. This is still a very strange article for me, but one can't deny the sheer amount of effort put into making it fit within the Halo universe. Somehow. I'm still trying to figure it all out to be honest. Actene: Heaven and Earth

SPARTAN-205

• Writer — Spartan-D042
• Nominator — Spartan-D042
• Date of Creation — January 14, 2015
• Date of Nomination — January 31, 2015
• Description — The story of Lancaster-205, a Class II SPARTAN-II and his numerous struggles to survive as well as his own descent into madness and fall from grace. Soldier, to victim, to villain.
• Why — While B042 has been my main article for ever, and still is, I started writing it when I was 12, as such it has some flaws that I've done my best to improve on but it'll take some time, Lancaster however I've put my heart and soul into creating, and is probably the hardest I've ever worked on an article ever.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support —: First to get the criticisms out of the way, this article continues a trend I've been seeing lately of featuring extremely short paragraphs that make the overall format seem somewhat choppy and disjointed. That being said, I found Lancaster to be a dynamic and engaging character, a combination that is often not found in Spartan articles. I like the narrative being spun with this character and look forward to seeing the developments further edits bring. The article could use with some more pictures, but aside from that and my earlier criticisms, I am happy to support this nomination for GA. Actene: Heaven and Earth
2. Support — First order of business, and this isn't just for you, D042, it's for every user with a Spartan that leaves the UNSC: rouge is a color, rogue means to break away. Now that that's over with, I really want to see the headers on this article broken down more clearly rather than all of them being on the same level. Put the sections about his history under a Biography header of some kind, maybe even further with Human-Covenant War and Post-War. Proofreading, you mention an Amber in the Sargasso section where you might mean Maroon, should probably clear that up. Also, remove the extra space between your first Quote template and the first paragraph, it leaves too much space right now (minor nitpick, but changeable as easily as one backspace press). While I'd like to see some grammatical revisions having to do with commas just for the flow of reading and agree with Actene on making more robust paragraphs, I also agree with him on this Spartan's story being a pleasant surprise to read. Starting with being just unpopular to a broken hero to full-on antagonist is really a great path. The headers thing is the one point I'd require a change on, and if you can, look into a tabber or some way to differentiate between Demons of Hope canon and any other universes you're including him in, but other than that, I'm for it. That Damn Sniper 02:43, February 8, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — I agree with Actene and Sniper. Still, it's certainly a well-written, worthy article that you've evidently put a lot of effort into and will only get better once the fixes listed above have been made. I would advise you to change up the 'Speciality' section of the infobox just a little bit as you've almost certainly copypasted the infobox of my Marco-025 article while making yours. Nothing wrong with taking inspiration, mind, but maybe adding a couple of extras and swapping them around would be for the best as I noticed it the moment I laid eyes on the article. Sorry if that sounds a little nitpicky, but otherwise the article's looking really great! 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Comments

Thanks Actene, means a lot coming from you. I'm a huge fan of your work and I very much appreciate the pointers. Spartans never die\Spartan-D042 (talk) 23:12, February 5, 2015 (UTC) Thanks to both of you for the constructive criticism, also a big fan of both your works and I will take all these into account. And yeah Brodie, caught me haha, wasn't sure where to find that actual template and I've never been to god with links but I'll do my best to get all diversified. Again, thanks a lot to both of you.Spartans never die\Spartan-D042 (talk) 04:53, February 8, 2015 (UTC)

Felo 'Ranak

• Writer — Brodie-001
• Nominator — Ahalosniper
• Date of Creation — May 30th, 2013
• Date of Nomination — March 18th, 2015
• Description — A Sangheili reformist and one of the most prominent Sangheili supporting Thel 'Vadam's reunification of their people in the Sigmaverse.
• Why — Length, image requirements, grammar and spelling are all up to snuff, and shows some of the better-known events during the Human-Covenant War, like Alpha Company's destruction at K7-49, from the less familiar Covenant side.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination. What have you to say, new judges? That Damn Sniper 00:26, March 19, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — A model example of a quality article, as I'd expect from Brodie. Although I'd like to see the "Skills and Abilities" and "Personality" sections filled out sooner rather than later. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
3. Support — My one criticism would be that the sections about battles seem to spend more time describing the larger scheme of events rather than the character himself. Still, perfectly suited for GA. Actene: Heaven and Earth
4. Support — I hadn't really attempted a Sangheili article before this, so it was a fun challenge for me to create this. Put a lot of effort into making Felo's article good. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
5. Neutral — While of GA quality, i feel that more than two unfinished sections is too many to warrant the award. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 03:36, April 5, 2015 (UTC)

Cody-B042

• Writer — Spartan-D042
• Nominator — Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation — October 7, 2011
• Date of Nomination — February 29, 2015
• Description — The story of a SPARTAN-III and his adventures as a agent hunting rogue Spartans.
• Why — I've been watching this article from a long time. You may call me an idiot for nominating a very old article, I don't care, but I like how much effort D042 has put into this article, and I was sad that it wasn't a Good Article. So I decided to nominate it now, atleast.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — Making notes as I go here, the first request I'd make is for the author to do a grammatical proofread. Things like additions or removals of commas and incomplete sentences (such as the second one in the intro) need to be smoothed over to improve its readability, but that's a relatively easy task. One minor canon inconsistency I find is that in Ghosts of Onyx, Lucy of Beta Company was pretty shocked to find Kurt's suit of MJOLNIR, which I've always taken to mean that while Kurt showed Alpha Company he was an S-II, he never showed Beta or Gamma. But, this could be chalked up to other things, so I'd leave the option open as to whether you want to remove the bit about Cody seeing Kurt in armor or not. Interesting you've tied in the Headhunters short story to CARTWHEEL, clever. There seems to be a lot of minor detail in the history which would typically go in a prose story, but I assume is being inserted here because you don't have plans for a fanfic novel covering it. Not that it's bad, I'm just noting it. I do it often enough myself, and the writing here reminds me a bit of the long S-II articles of yore. As ever, I appreciate that you skirt around identifying Noble Six (been reading my guide, have you?). You should look at using a Main Article template under Operation: LYNCH MOB, or at least imitate its effect since there are two links. Overall, I think this article has what it takes to be a Good Article and goes a fair bit beyond, and I feel comfortable putting my support behind it. That Damn Sniper 09:43, March 30, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — Overall the article is fine; my only real criticism is that the relationship section looks sloppy and detracts from the overall quality. However, there is at least one red link present in the article, which goes against the GA guidelines. Once that is fixed, I'll be happy to reconsider my vote.--Issues have been fixed, as per talks with D042. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Support — Everything seems to be in order. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
4. Neutral — I personally feel there is too many unfinished sections to warrant good article status just yet - that aside, i is up to snuff. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 00:31, March 31, 2015 (UTC)
5. Support — This was on my GA examples list. A page, that, while not perfect, is well written and well organized. It definitely has my vote. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}

Comments

• I've corrected that issue Actene, thank you for reminding me, honestly wasn't expecting Cody to be nominated. On the subject of the relationships, how would one clean that up? Another page entirely? Also, ASniper, that was just a careless mistake, thank you for catching it, and the support means a lot, thanks man! User:Spartan-D042 screw this sig stuff 20:25, March 30, 2015 (UTC)
  • I personally would take out the bullet format and use a standard section/subsection format you used for the bio section. I would also limit the people included to those who are particularly close to Cody or important to his story in some way, as the list itself is a bit overlong. Actene: Heaven and Earth
    • Alrighty, I've done that as well, is there anything else required to change your mind? I'm happy to continue editing.

One more vote to go... – Coolbuddy (talk • blogs) 13:59, March 31, 2015 (UTC)

Pete Stacker (AAO)

• Writer — Ahalosniper
• Nominator — Actene
• Date of Creation — March 23, 2010
• Date of Nomination — May 12, 2015
• Description — A legendary Marine veteran of the Insurrectionist conflicts, the Great War, and the post-war conflicts.
• Why — A long suffering article that has received relatively little recognition despite the effort that has gone into expanding this iconic Halo NPC. As with all his canon expansions, Sniper has done a great job in breathing life and personality into his subject matter. While the post-war content is sadly lacking, the article covers the history all the way through the end of the Great War and as such is more than deserving of GA status.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per the nomination. Actene: Heaven and Earth
2. Support — A high quality article in the relatively lost art of canon expansion Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 16:27, May 13, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — Unsurprisingly, this is a quality piece of work from a veteran user with a generally excellent track record. It is everything a Good Article should be. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
4. Support — Great article, definitely worthy of the award. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Victorian Independent State

• Writer — Minuteman 2492
• Nominator — Brodie-001
• Date of Creation — December 24th, 2013
• Date of Nomination — June 21st, 2015
• Description —An article detailing the rise of an independently-controlled rebel colony that broke out of UNSC control during the Human-Covenant War.
• Why — In addition to meeting the GA requirements, Lancer's done a lot of work on this article recently and I'm impressed by the lengths gone to fully detail the problems surrounding the creation of such a state and how both the colony and its inhabitants were affected over the years.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As per nomination. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
2. Neutral — Would suggest Lancer remove the superfluous links throughout - take Howard Graves, Victoria, and UNSC as examples, they are linked every time they are mentioned when the first time is sufficient. If the repetitious hotlinking was addressed throughout, the article would meet GA status. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 18:44, June 21, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — Although I agree with Chak that the links should be reduced down to the first time something is mentioned, that's a fairly quick fix, and once it is implemented, this article will certainly be worthy of GA status. It's truly yet another testimony to how far Lancer has come since his rocky start a few years back. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
4. Support — I'm also with Chak on this one; while links throughout do make an article look better, this sort of over-saturation is pretty hard on the eyes. I'm still supporting, because this is an incredibly developed and well put together article. Excellent work. Actene: Heaven and Earth
5. Neutral — I have to concur with Chak, the repetitive links are a little jarring when reading through. And, as I recently reminded myself, using a link to a particular thing only one time is in our Manual of Style. Also, in the intro, "which led to the Independent State to be forced" might want to be seen to. Once the link repetition's sorted, aye, its spelling and grammar are up to par, images abound, and has some nice canon nods. That Damn Sniper 23:28, June 22, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Ahalosniper — Who are we? Heroes? Monsters? Cowards? TALK • CONTRIBUTIONS — {{{time}}} You know, Lancer, you've still got three links to Victoria in the intro alone, and quite a few UNSC duplicates, especially towards the end. Ctrl+F will find any term you look for while editing, and it may speed up the redundancy check process.

Anonymous ONI agent - Gwneud o dân, a gyda chalonnau wneud o iâ. "From this moment onward, you are Egon Talorus. And to humanity, you are everything.": TALK - 12:33, July 15, 2015 (UTC) Additionally, although doesn't work in browsers (or at least not Google Chrome/Chromium), but in raw text editors such as Notepad++ or Sublime, Ctrl+R lets you perform find & replace.

Lhor Konar

• Writer — Revan180193
• Nominator — Andromeda Vadum
• Date of Creation — June 3rd, 2015
• Date of Nomination — July 7th, 2015
• Description — A Sangheili character and former Special Operations Commander who, after the Human-Covenant War decided to back down from his position because he thought he had served a shameful course. Despite his cybernetic enhancements, this character shows tremendous honor and bears true faith to his word.
• Why — Revan has put a lot of effort into the article, and within a one month timeframe. 20,000 bytes and still growing; there is no doubt that this is an article worthy of GA status.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — There's clearly been a lot of work put into this article, especially as the writer, if I'm not mistaken, primarily uses another language. This does, however, lead to a few grammatical hiccups which make sentences read awkwardly; I'd recommend finding a peer to give it a proofreading once-over. There's enough solid content there for the article to qualify, although I might recommend a couple more images, chronicling Lhor's life through the Human-Covenant War and beyond, but I would bring up some things about the story behind the article to consider. First is his augmentations; Sangheili are noted to reject medicine almost entirely, so to have entire prosthetic limbs would probably be a source of shame for him, and that's not really reflected in the story, although he does suffer from the injuries. This is a culture that'd rather fight bare-handed than pick up a human weapon and ritual suicide is very common. There should be a reason given that he doesn't take his own life during his depression, perhaps by reuniting with Huna earlier. Speaking of her, I'm a bit confused on why the supposed highest-ranking Weapons Master, in charge of all maintenance for a fleet, would be assigned to the Spec Ops Commander, rather than reporting to the Fleet Master. This should probably be changed, but they could still certainly interact and grow attached. When she has an entire fleet to care for, I find it hard to see her tending to his armor personally, unless you make it clear it's a personal favor she wants to take on. Lastly, any ship names should have two apostrophes ('') on either side to italicize them. Consider these, and yeah, I think this will make it as a Good Article. Author has diligently gone through the character's story and fixed grammatical hiccups and addressed the cultural concerns. A good article, indeed. That Damn Sniper 06:24, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
2. Oppose — Sniper has already laid out all the details, so all I can really do is reiterate what he wrote. The article and character both have potential but are severely hampered by grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing throughout. I recommend several full read-throughs for proofreading purposes. I didn't take as much issue with the cultural stuff as Sniper did, though I recommend looking over his criticisms and making whatever changes you feel mesh with what you want to do with the character. For my part, a grammar workover should be enough to change my vote to support. Actene: Heaven and Earth

• • Update: A lot of the issues have been fixed, though I'm still picking up a few grammar mistakes here and there. Most notably, some of the section headers are not capitalized. If need be, I can go through the article and pick out some of the remaining grammar errors. I'd really like to support the GA status, but for now I have to maintain my original vote. Actene: Heaven and Earth

1. Oppose — Sniper basically said my thoughts already. With some polishing it could easily be GA material, but in its current state it is not. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
2. Support — I'm inclined to take a neutral vote for this one. The article isn't bad at all, but it's got some easily-remedied issues that should be fixed to nudge it into GA-level quality. The issues seem to be fixed now. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Support — As per above. Well earned. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 16:17, July 26, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Okay judges, after carefully proofreading the article, I have managed to fix the grammatical mistakes to the best of my ability. Maybe I don't have the eye to spot them all, but it should be "Good" now, lol. Two weeks left! Lets turn those opposes into supports!

Andromeda Vadum | Talk • Contribs

That would be a great help Actene. Thanks in advance. Revan180193 (talk) 21:05, July 30, 2015 (UTC)

Marco-025

• Writer — Brodie-001
• Nominator — Auguststorm1945
• Date of Creation — August 3, 2010
• Date of Nomination — July 18, 2015
• Description — A biography detailing the long life of SPARTAN-II Marco-025.
• Why — When this article was previously nominated on May 28, 2011, the review board voted it down 3-2 on the basis of poor formatting, which is no longer an issue. The author has also made use of the Quote template, as advised by members of the review board. With its issues fixed and an Annual Award as "Best SPARTAN of 2014", I believe Marco-025 is excellent example of what a Halo Fanon Good Article should be.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — A Spartan-II article with a bio as long as the five great S-IIs of old. Having seen a lot of development since its last nomination, I'm in support of it. That Damn Sniper 08:53, July 19, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — I'm surprised this wasn't given GA ages ago. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
3. Support — If there were a pantheon of Spartan-IIs on this wiki, this article would happily take its place among the old gods. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 16:18, July 26, 2015 (UTC)
4. Support — As per the others. Actene: Heaven and Earth
5. Support — Well, I'm flattered by this. As the second article I ever created I've always tried to keep Marco's article at a high level of quality as one of my most important characters. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Split-class amphibious supercarrier

• Writer — Sev40
• Nominator — Sev40
• Date of Creation — June 25th, 2015
• Date of Nomination — August 15th, 2015
• Description — The largest ships during the Interplanetary War, these ships were designed to fulfill the UN's (and later UNSC's) carrier and command operations.
• Why — I've been working on this particular article for a while now, and I believed I've detailed every possible aspect of this ship in the maximum - its role, interior, history, known ships, stuff like that. I've also noticed a lack of pre-war ships on the wiki (haven't found any articles on a ship thats over 50 years old), and hope that this will inspire users to create more content in what is a very unexplained part of the Halo timeline, and help flesh it out.
• Status — Granted GA status

Voting

1. Support — Sorry, but the article doesn't meet the requirements for a Good Article yet. It does have an impressive amount of content, over the length minimum, but you need at least eighty words in the intro paragraph at the top, and two images, but these can easily be added. You might look to the helicarriers from Marvel's Captain America: The Winter Soldier for likely images (was probably a source of inspiration, eh?). Interesting that you're looking to expand on some of the long-ago backstory for Halo and the UNSC, but I might question the usefulness of a vessel that old in a conflict four centuries after their creation up against technology lightyears ahead of anything even the UNSC had at the time, and the ability of a ship designed like that to get out of orbit with tech just a century and a half away from our present time, but I enjoyed reading through the sections about the wars they originally took part in. A bit more explanation could be given for where they were stored and why these facilities were forgotten about, however. There'd be a lot of material in those ships which people would very likely want to recycle to make newer, modern warships with, so I feel it's important to justify the lack of discovery of these through four centuries. I'm glad, also, that you have them playing a very minimal role in the Human-Covenant War, as a scrambled-for last resort only found because places like Crow's Nest were being uncovered. There's a lot of good stuff here, and just a few additions would get my support for it. Article's been updated to fit base requirements, and stands as a GA-worthy article in this user's opinion. That Damn Sniper 00:14, August 16, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — Everything seems to be in order. It's not often that you see stuff dating back to the Interplanetary War era that's handled correctly, and this is done very well. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
3. Support — Per Brodie. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
4. Support — As per the others. My one suggestion is that the images on the page be updated to a larger size; the current format is very cramped and does not make for easy viewing. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Comments

Well, thanks for telling me about those requirements. I've added in a few pictures and extended the introduction, and explained why they disappeared and where the surviving facilities are. And I have considered these would be valuable for that - the Pacific was scrapped to build a military base. Thanks for your critiques as well, hopefully the article is now that little bit better. (Sev40 (talk) 03:11, August 18, 2015 (UTC))

Swarms of Palamok

• Writer — Revan180193
• Nominator — Revan180193
• Date of Creation — January 19, 2015‎
• Date of Nomination — October 01, 2015
• Description — Take on what a Yanme'e faction could be like before, during and after the Human-Covenant War. It contains both bits of history, ranks and technologies developed by the Yanme'e and more.
• Why — The article looks into and adds to the Yanme'es background, a fact I believe is much needed for the Yanme'e, as they are generally overlooked in favor of the Sangheili and Jiralhanae in my opinion. The article started out as a tiny project for a now dead rpg but recently it has drawn me to add to it and expand upon the idea and concept And I hope to use this faction in coming works, both other rpg's and stories in the future.
• Status — Granted GA standing.

Voting

1. Support — The article has a few problems, namely minor grammar fixes like is/are and was/were switches, missed capitalizations, and missed 's's where some thing should be plural, but they're not egregious and could be fixed by a peer proofread, as probably could some awkward phrasing, but Revan does a good job expanding the history and overarching organization of the Drones here. I would like more time to be spent in the very first section of the article, though, about how they evolve a planet-wide government in the first place. I imagine it being really hard for one Queen to maintain dominance if they use pheromones to control over the lower castes; I mean, how does one Queen circulate her control pheromone over the whole planet, if that's how it works? Maybe by targeting other Queens to control and leaving the drones to them once they're dominated? And there's all sorts of opportunity for comparisons to human values. I mean, the average Drone is sentient, but its life is second to it's Queen's, and making self-sacrifice not even a noble idea to them. All sorts of things to consider, and this is well on its way. That Damn Sniper 09:44, October 2, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — I'd like to see the pheromone-control-thingamajig issue sorted before I can feel comfortable supporting GA status for this page. It seems to be a very central idea to how the Yanme'e function, and to give an explanation filled with so many holes is a major issue in my eyes. Additionally, I wholeheartedly disagree with Sniper about making the Yanme'e more human, as I feel this to be wholly inappropriate considering how fundamentally inhuman they look and apparently behave. The idea of individualism would probably not even exist for them, and that one story from Halo: Evolutions seems to support that drones who do develop some level of individuality are considered deviant and defective and are separated from the rest of the species. Applying anything resembling human values or morals to them would in my eyes be doing both the Yanme'e and this page a grave disservice. Looks good now, so I'll give it my support. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
   1. That's what I'm saying. From the Black Team short in Evolutions, we know Drones individually are sentient, but they're so different I imagine it could lead to some misunderstandings between humans, or other Covenant species, and the Drones. Think the Buggers in Ender's Game, how they didn't realize every human was as unique as one of their Queens. That Damn Sniper 20:26, October 2, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — As per the nomination. I agree there are some issues regarding the nature of Drones here, but the article is still well written and fits within site policies. Actene: Heaven and Earth
4. Support — Everything seems to be in order. It's not often that you get a decent article focusing on the Yanme'e, so this was a very interesting read. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
5. Support — As per above Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 10:52, October 13, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

I'm currently trying to write the pheromones into the article, though it might take some time due to some RL the next couple of days that'll keep me from the pc and this site. Revan180193 (talk) 18:02, October 2, 2015 (UTC)

I have added the Pheromones (along with some info on their physical build) and expanded on their history from before they encountered the Covenant. Revan180193 (talk) 19:26, October 7, 2015 (UTC)

Palamok

• Writer — Sev40
• Nominator — Sev40
• Date of Creation — September 22, 2015
• Date of Nomination — October 20, 2015
• Description — A detailed description about the history, politics and geography of the Yanme'e homeworld of Palamok.
• Why — The races of the Covenant aren't very well explained for the most part, and what little there is of it is dedicated to the Sangheili and San'Shyuum. The same goes for their homeworlds, the client specie's centre of government - even the bare necessities are ignored. I tried to explain the history of the Yanme'e homeworld, and how it has influenced their customs and culture.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — As I stated on its talk page, the article's very comprehensive, and takes more of a Location article approach than Revan's article, though they do both tackle the matter of Yanme'e politics and structure. Gets a pass from me. That Damn Sniper 22:46, October 22, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — A well written article about an under-utilised species. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 23:47, October 22, 2015 (UTC)
3. Support — As per the above. It's great to see someone working on the Yanme'e, who've really been put out of focus in Halo for the past few years. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
4. Support — Another Yanme'e article, eh? Anyways, per the above. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}

Kyle Craig

• Writer — Andromeda Vadum
• Nominator — Andromeda Vadum
• Date of Creation — June 05, 2014
• Date of Nomination — November 09, 2015
• Description — Once a UNSC soldier who joined the Spartan-IV program, he was presumed dead by his comrades. Brainwashed into serving the insurrectionists cause he became emotionally detached and began to schematically kill off his captors. When he returns to earth he presumably lives a normal life until the day he becomes involved in an accident that changed everything. From then on Kyle became obsessed with plotting what newsmongers called 'the most sophisticated crime of human history' while leaving behind little to no trace evidence. He wanted to prove nothing more than to earn the title of criminal mastermind and was ready to kill anyone who was determined to take it from him.
• Why — I fill that there are very little criminal characters that have been bestowed with the good article status. I have put numerous ideas into this article and believe that this character is characterized in a unique way, and will continue to grow in the following years. Kyle has become one of my most prominent antagonist articles. I intended to use him in the Hammer Fall RP as a minor character. Someone to assist in small story portions and then toss aside. And ever since the RP's discontinuance, I've expanded on the character to the point where he now fits within his own universe of dominating the criminal underworld. Now Halo-Fanon voting staff, it is time for you to decide if this article deserves recognition, because in my opinion: I think it has a chance to be among the other well-written articles this site has to feature. And yes, this would be my first.
• Status — NOMINATION FAILED.

Voting

1. Oppose — While I understand that quite a bit of effort has gone into this article, I cannot support it for GA status at this time. This article suffers from awkward wording and grammar mistakes throughout. Some sections are written in past tense while others are written in the present tense, making for a confusing read. I would recommend you read through it yourself several times for proofreading. I also recommend that you review the content itself and offer some more details regarding plot events; for example, you mention that Avery Johnson offered Kyle a place in the UNSCMC but provide no details regarding Kyle's actual enlistment or training. Again, I would recommend you read through the article a few times to revise the grammar and syntax issues. Actene: Heaven and Earth
2. Oppose — There is certainly potential here, but I agree with Actene that there are some sentences with awkward syntax, and a couple of grammar errors. I also think that some content needs reworked and further fleshed out before I think it is worthy of good article status. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 15:34, November 9, 2015 (UTC)
3. Oppose — There are peculiar hiccups in the article, including punctuation in the quote and first sentence of the introduction, or "condone" where you might've meant some synonym for "participate", which a peer edit could probably help with. Although not an issue, I might comment that the Cortez Cartel could actually benefit from its members joining the military for one short tour; not that they could get someone high in the ranks feeding them anything useful, but to have its members given that kind of training with weapons and equipment of military grade. Why Johnson's on Earth at the time dealing with crime is odd, but not inexplicable. "Deferred to him" rather than "referred" would make more sense in the TRAINING section. That, also, could be a header by using more "=" rather than an allcap'd word on its own . . . or is that meant to be a placeholder, since the section under it is what happens to him early in the military? Regardless, it's pretty sparse for the how and why of things. It also seems pretty short for explanation of why he's picked up by ONI, and for the SPARTAN-IVs, all of which amounts to him taking part in one mission. It kinda seems almost like you're collecting badges of groups he belonged to with him joining the military, then ONI and the Spartans, then the Insurrection rather than giving him development by telling how and why. Telling us the Insurrection used "extreme methods" of brainwashing him within the same one day he lacks smoothers after being away from the UNSC is far less effective than, say, having the lack of anti-psychotics contribute to the process of brainwashing which might've taken weeks, not to mention who in the Insurrection was responsible for the idea of brainwashing a Spartan and was able to pull it off with success, limited though it was. The mission for the Insurrection is one of the places I can see Actene's qualm with tense-changing. I can understand it, with some events being covered in stories while you want to tell the events of others that aren't, but you need to keep a constant level of distance from the events through the article. For instance, "When he tries to kill Josh Konaree, he is defeated, arrested by UNSC personnel, and sent to UNSC Maximum Security Detention Facility" is not the same level of distance as his fight with the anonymous Insurrectionist team leader woman. While I know you haven't gotten to the part about him trying to pull off the ultimate crime yet, it wouldn't hurt to define what he means by it. I mean, what's the ultimate crime? One act that combines every felony into some ridiculous Rube Goldberg machine of death? And giving him a reason beyond enjoying it would probably help; a killer who enjoys killing just for its sake is just going to try to keep going with the act, small scale and trying not to get caught, but if you emphasize that ambition that he wants to be the ultimate criminal, and that someone who wants to be the best wants to be recognized as the best, it's probably going to go over better. He's also probably not much of a mastermind if he's the one actually committing the crimes and at risk of being caught, often as I see it without real planning. Lastly, I know there are plenty of recognizable faces used across the site for character faces, I think the Joker might be going a little too far into recognizable territory, though that's personal opinion. So, bottom lines; the article meets image and formatting standards, but grammar and some narrative logic things need some working out, the latter of which is hardest because it means reconsidering ideas and then rewriting them. For now, I don't think it's at GA level. That Damn Sniper 07:13, November 10, 2015 (UTC)
4. Oppose — I don't like having to oppose this. While it shouldn't necessarily be embarrassing to have one's article rejected for GA status, even if it is unanimously, it is still likely to be felt regardless, and I dislike having to contribute to that. But I concur with the assessments on the grammatical issues mentioned by the other three panel members, and these alone prevent it from meeting GA standards. As for characterization issues, ASniper's fuckhuge text wall leaves little to be said in that department, so instead I think I'll offer some advice. Creating a good villain is a very subtle art as well as an incredibly difficult one to master. It helps to characterize your villains as people first and villains second. People rarely want to do harm, and rarely try to be bad people. When people do bad things, it is generally either because they believe that it is actually beneficial to the the world or because they have an uncontrolled urge that cannot sated by anything else, not because they have set out with the goal of making the world worse. I feel like a good motivation for this character would be obsession, either with the elimination of his enemies or with creating the perfect, infallible plot that cannot be foiled. The YouTube series Extra Credits has some great videos on the subject of villain characterization that you cam watch if you'd like further suggestions on how to go about writing this character. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
5. Oppose — Yeah, I'm afraid there's not really much more I can say that hasn't already been said. I think you've certainly got a decent base here, but the problems noted by the other judges kind of drag it down. Once the article has been sufficiently spruced up it should stand a better chance. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Comments

Thank you everyone for taking the time to read through the article and point out the mistakes that are present. Past and present tenses are not my strong suit. In fact it's one of the few reasons why I have a hard time communicating with people; it probably even shows in my writing. So i'm guessing the way it's read is that it's like reading in the past then going into the present and back again? Do I need to keep everything in past tense or present? Not both? Is the punctuation up to par? Do I have too many commas and not enough semicolons, or very little commas?

Other than that, all I need to do is tell more about the how and why of things? Anything else I need to bring the article up to GA quality? I really don't want to rewrite the whole article entirely as it could diminish any ideas I have going on and contradict with other things, but maybe just reword the phrases and sentences? I really think this should be marked as 'failed' until I can really put some effort into fixing the character up and to meet the needs of the panel as I have to juggle between both work and life.--Andromeda Vadum (talk) 11:20, November 10, 2015 (UTC)

Ahalosniper — Who are we? Heroes? Monsters? Cowards? TALK • CONTRIBUTIONS — {{{time}}} There's a month before judgement really has to be rendered, and two judges have yet to weigh in. Aye, tenses sometimes and the distance, or specificity of some events as I mentioned above. It's something that everyone develops over time. Past tense is preferable for articles, because then it feels more like a Wikipedia article, always talking about past events. It's not so much quantity for the punctuation as the right placement. If you like, I'd be willing to do a little proofreading to start you on the right track, maybe leave some notes for suggested revisions embedded in the article itself.

That would be great Ahalosniper. And a month should be enough time to amend the articles mistakes as well as expand on some sections. I really would appreciate the help.--Andromeda Vadum (talk) 09:15, November 11, 2015 (UTC)

Halo: The Fall of Reach

• Writer — Coolbuddy379
• Nominator — Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation — January 23, 2015
• Date of Nomination — November 13, 2015
• Description — An article about a game based on the Halo: The Fall of Reach novel and its Animated Series counterpart.
• Why — This is probably the best article I've ever worked on Halo Fanon. I've been writing it since January of 2015 till now, although I was inactive for a long time due to exams and other things. I've put a huge amount of effort on making this one of the best game article there is on Halo Fanon (although Halo Wars: The Great War is the biggest). I plan to create it to the level Sonasaurus did with his Halo: First Strike article, and if possible, evern more. Right now, I think it is big enough to be granted GA status.
• Status — Nomination Failed

Voting

1. Oppose — Sorry, but the article doesn't quite meet the 15,000 byte length requirement for information articles, and most of that is in very sparse lists and the coding for tables. You are working from a good model, however. First Strike is much the same with its lists, but I feel more confident in calling that ready for GA and not Fall of Reach here because First Strike exceeds the minimum length and has a good number of its sub-pages for levels filled out with enough data nearly to qualify for GA on its own. The grammar and spelling, conventions, and use of code and images on Fall of Reach is superb, and I want to see more added so it can become a Good Article, but I don't think there's enough content just yet. Keep at it though, because I do want to see it back again. That Damn Sniper 04:28, November 15, 2015 (UTC)
2. Oppose — As per Sniper, it's a good concept but it needs a bit more content on the page before I can approve it for GA. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Oppose — As per above. It's well laid out and there is potential here, but there isn't enough content there to justify good article status right now. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 20:05, November 17, 2015 (UTC)
4. Oppose — Per above. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
5. Oppose — As per the others. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」

Comments

Thanks for the opinion Sniper. It means a lot for me. I'm gonna soon add the Characters, Locations, Species and other things. I'm currently working on making the Special edition pics of the game, and if possible, a gameplay pic. Also, are sub-pages necessary? Because I don't want to write the whole transcript of 11 campaign levels. I guess I'd just make the pages and leave it like that. Thanks for your interest in this article.

Regards. DecryptedPixel: Ignoramus Et Ignorabimus 05:21, November 15, 2015 (UTC)

Ahalosniper — Who are we? Heroes? Monsters? Cowards? TALK • CONTRIBUTIONS — {{{time}}} Aye, the sub-pages aren't the important bit, especially because they aren't on the page up for the GA status itself. What I'd like to see more than additional lists of characters and species, actually, is an expansion of the paragraphs within the article itself that talk about the game, what it includes, what's changed since the last one, etc., because that's the majority of the content to read. Additionally something to note, although I'm not sure if it's still XBox's policy, is that games can have 49 achievements on release and a max of only 1000 Gamerscore, with DLC adding additional.

S-D379 - "Our greatest glory is not in never falling, but in rising every time we fall.": TALK - 14:55, November 15, 2015 (UTC). Today is Friday, April 19, 2024 Yeah, the list is included the DLC ones. I guess I'll change it now. I'm gonna flesh out soon. Once again, thanks.

Halo Wars: The Great War

• Writer — Samdoo
• Nominator — Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation — August 31st, 2013 (approx.)
• Date of Nomination — November 22, 2015
• Description — An amazingly written article of a RTS game that spans out the history of the entire HCW.
• Why — This is one of the greatest article that has ever lived on Halo Fanon. The author has spent 2 years in making it a perfect masterpiece. I'm surprised it hasn't received Good Article status yet.
• Status — Granted GA status.

Voting

1. Support — It's rather handy to have Coolbuddy's nomination to compare to, as it might help him with buffing up Fall of Reach. Now, this article is still quite listy, but I'm coming to see that may be inevitable with game articles, but the sheer length of it means there's plenty of solid content to be had. That content is still, however, in very short paragraphs most of the time. The intro is a big opportunity Fall of Reach is missing out on at the moment. Because this is a good opportunity to bring it up, we should mention that our policy on images should be referred to. I don't know if Samdoo sought out the original creator of the image used for the game's cover, or Coolbuddy for Fall of Reach, but modifying somebody's fanart could be dodgy with copyright and fair use laws. In short, it's fine, but if the creator sees it and wants it taken down, it'll have to be done at once. The chances of that happening are unlikely, but it's happened before. That Damn Sniper 23:47, November 22, 2015 (UTC)
2. Support — It isn't often that an article wins FOTM before GA, but that only highlights this article's overall quality. A solid and quite lengthy game article. Actene: Heaven and Earth
3. Support — This is an excellent example of how a game article should be written. Samdoo's consistently been updating and improving the page since its creation and it certainly deserves the GA badge. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
4. Support — Despite my yearning desire to oppose an article about a game that is both on Xbox One and Mac, I'm afraid I must admit that this is a well-written article with a lot of effort put into it, so I suppose I'll support it. I'd recommend getting rid of those pesky arrows on the external links, though. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}

Comments

• Sniper, I just wanted to tell you that Samdoo has created the box art on his own. If you look closely, you can see that the Spartan, the cliff, the Covenant ships, the mountain and the warthogs all are edited to create an epic box art. Also, can you tell with which article did the incident happen last time? Yeah, I used an image on the Internet for my box art, but I'm trying to make my own. Cheers. DecryptedPixel: Ignoramus Et Ignorabimus 16:02, November 23, 2015 (UTC)

Ahalosniper — Who are we? Heroes? Monsters? Cowards? TALK • CONTRIBUTIONS — {{{time}}} That would've been User:Ez'rathel, over some art created by User:EclypseDusk. He got a civility warning over how he handled himself (which you can view on Talk:Cryptic-Class Heavy Frigate and User talk:EclypseDusk) when the artist asked for its removal, but really, the warning was never about the image. Just over his civility. So, as long as one is polite and amiable about that sort of thing, they've got nothing to worry about.

S-D379 - If you're expecting something here, you're probably disappointed by now.: TALK - 13:04, November 24, 2015 (UTC). Today is Friday, April 19, 2024 Well, the image was one which I found on the Internet, not on this site, but if wanted, I can gladly remove the current box art. Just asking, do you have Reach. Because I want a picture for the cover art. If you accept, I shall get you the specifications. EDIT: Well, shit. I remembered that the File share was taken down for Reach. Still, if anyone can help me, I will be grateful.

Halo: The Fall of Reach (Renominated)

• Writer — Coolbuddy379
• Nominator — Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation — January 23, 2015
• Date of Nomination — January 23, 2016
• Description — An article about the game version of the popular Halo novel Halo: The Fall of Reach
• Why — I have totally fleshed out this article, though many parts are yet to be written. Yes, I know that the Plot section needs to be completed, but one main reason for nominating this article was to nominate it after exactly one year. As of now, I feel it is enough to get GA status.
• Status — GA status granted.

Voting

1. Support — Looks fine to me. 「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
2. Support — Aye. There's a great deal more original content over what was already a fine barebones framework now. Good work. That Damn Sniper 23:38, January 22, 2016 (UTC)
3. Support — Per above. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 00:07, January 23, 2016 (UTC)
4. Support — All of my concerns from the previous nomination attempt have been addressed. Actene: Heaven and Earth
5. Support — Per above. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}

Comments

Thanks for the support, dudes. It's great. Also yeah, Sniper, I totally agree with you. I looked back at the page when it was first nominated and thought, "Seriously, I nominated my page when it looked like this?" :D Now, it's looking good, a lot good if you allow me to say. Once again, thanks to you all. DecryptedPixel: Ignoramus Et Ignorabimus 16:01, January 23, 2016 (UTC)

Tyler-A319

• Writer — Coolbuddy379
• Nominator — Coolbuddy379
• Date of Creation — January 14, 2016
• Date of Nomination — February 4, 2016
• Description — An article about one of the few Alpha Company SPARTAN-IIIs left
• Why — This is my best character article ever. I've spent a lot of work in it, and there's a lot to be yet written. However, in its current state, I feel it's good to be granted GA status.
• Status — GA status granted.

Voting

1. Support — I'm a little wary of this article, as it seems to have sprung up and been nominated very quickly with the specific intention of shooting for GA. But, then, that could be a good thing; like a test of abilities, a threshold to shoot for. The article exceeds the byte limit by ten thousand, so even though a good chunk of that length is probably coding, there's a decent amount of content (though at just two thousand words or so, it could stand a good deal more). The quote at the top I'd say is a bit uninspired, but if that's the statement you want to set the tone of the article, there's nothing wrong with it. I start getting worried when he's "specialized in reconnaissance, sniping, hand-to-hand combat and many other things". Comparing him to Jun and Linda and other S-IIs later on seems like a little too much self-praise for the character to me, and that leads down the path to Mary-Sueism. Especially when he killed a Covenant soldier at 5 or 6, and is leading a Noble-esque team as a Commander on top of it. The infobox and first image on the page also stack up on each other, but that's because I use a different wikia view, but I might advise moving that first image down a paragraph or so. While the article itself meets requirements, there are some things about the content itself, things like very basic-seeming sentences, that don't quite sit right with me. The spelling and grammar are fine, I imagine you spell-checked everything, which is good, but sometimes there's an omitted word or thing that doesn't quite make sense. If I'm honest, I think articles less worthy have made GA, but if this is something you're shooting for as a test of your abilities, I'd recommend finding an experienced user to go through it with you and proofread the text to make suggestions. It's a fine article, but I'm not sure it's quite GA yet. Diligent work has been put into setting these concerns right. That Damn Sniper 17:08, February 12, 2016 (UTC)
2. Neutral —I share Sniper's opinion on the content. I find that there is little in the way of nuance for the character, he just seems to be good at things with few, if any, negative traits. A few tweaks need to be made to make this article GA, but they aren't drastic changes: you just need to make him less a character and more a person with doubts, and failings and regrets. Joshua ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 07:40, February 6, 2016 (UTC)
3. Support — Unfortunately the article's got quite a few problems in its current form that I've pointed out on its talk page, so I can't honestly support this for GA right now. Seems to be good enough now.
   「 Brodie-001: Finished the fight」
4. Oppose — Per Sniper. While technically, it meets GA standards, there are too many more minute issues that make me unwilling to see it granted GA status in its current state. »Anonymous ONI agent« ^{[COMMS] [SERVICE RECORD]}
5. Support — Although I share many of the reservations listed above, I do believe a lot of the problems have been addressed and the page formatting is quite good. I'm giving this a very tentative support. Actene: Heaven and Earth

Comments

Coolbuddy, the intro needs to be 80 words or more. Andromeda Vadum | Talk • Contribs

Oh right, I forgot that, hehe. Fixed. DecryptedPixel: Ignoramus Et Ignorabimus

S-D379 — Preparing A.I. Intrusion countermeasures TALK • CONTRIBUTIONS — 14:14, February 7, 2016 (UTC) I've fixed all of the issues, Brodie. Check it out nao. And yes Sniper, I'll probably start working on revamping the paragraphs today. Thanks for reading through the article and giving advice.