Forum:Machinma

Hey, Justanothergrunt here, haven't really been on here for a while (and'll be off for a while soon thanks to my yearlys) but I need some help, me and some mates have written up scripts for about 10 eps of our own machinima show but have found ourselves with a couple of problems, we're in need of a capture card and a few more "model actors" that is people with XBL who are willing to come online, change how their character looks and move as shown, we've gotten pretty much everything else sorted, voice-actors, script ect, so if you could lend a hand that'd be greatly appreciated and don't worry I know everyones a little busy atm, but I just want to make sure there is a capture card somewhere out there, we won't be doing this for a while. Anywho, to get you lot going I may as well show you the script for the pilot, please tell me what you all think of it, :)

A picture of Earth, then in Big Blocky letters with the Narrator shouting as it flies in "Earth At War"

Narrator: Oh-Ho, now u all know Earth, that splendid planet at the centre of the Universe that everyone loves so, wait, what's that u say? Not every1? (Shows Aliens in Olde Time going Grrrrrrr) That's right, Earth does have an Enemy, the Evil Alien Empire that's threatening our Galaxy Spanning Colonies That's why Earth (show's a bunch of dead aliens being hit by Humans with fire around and unarmed Aliens running)has sent it's millions of troops to Invade and plunder their hapless society hahaha, I guess those Aliens never saw it coming (Shows in Oldey Vision a Spartan T-Bagging an Alien body) And as our Honorable soldiers forever stride forth into the unknown, let us not forget our all-conquering heroes, the saviors of peace and Justice, the Human Race.”

After Propaganda Video

Kane’s head pops up “RUN AWAY!”

Distance shot from high up shows a few humans running from a bunch of aliens (some humans are just running in circles)

Billy “This is it Billy, your moment to shine, the time to prove to your family, your friends, your self, that you were worth it, for your honor, now you must take your stand! HEY YOU BIG SMEGGIN JERK!” (gets pulverized by Wraith)

Kane “NO! Not….um….soldier…uh…CONTINUE TO RUN AWAY!”

(Team runs into their base)

Kane “Everyone here? If your not, speak now.”

Alex “Billy’s not here, he got blasted by the wraith”

Kane “So…we’ve lost…uh….Private…Billy?...Billy, rest in peace, dear friend, we will not forget, now, someone get me communications with the head of the corps.”

Jax “Can’t we just bring the whole body?”

Guido “Allready on it sir, and can I say how calm your acting under pressure”

Kane “Yes...yes you can, right after you tell them at HQ we need reinforcements, (Shouted up) Shaq, how’re your men doing up there?”

Shaq “We’re all fine, I think we got em into a retreat, thanks for asking sir”

Kane “Good, Guido, still make that call, Blee’s gonna need a replacement.”

Flashes to Show Lynch and Chan on Guard duty, looking as a Hornet flies in.

Chan “Hey Guido, New guy’s coming in.”

Hornet crashes into wall of base and falls to ground

Chan “…Oh…never mind”

Lynch “Hey Guido, call up another replacement”

Newman is shown stumbling out of the wreckage

Lynch “oh…never mind”

Guido and Jax are shown walking out of the base towards Newman

Guido “Uh….nice landing.”

Newman “Yes sir!...wait…sorry sir!”

Guido “forget it, we had a spare Hornet anyways…so, newguy, suppose we’d best do introductions, this is Jax, our vehicle and explosives expert, and I’m Guido Enriquez Taquito Violente, (cough) second (cough) in command of this squad”

Jax “I’m no vehicle expert, but I don’t think that part of the plane should be on fire.”

Kane shown looking down from above, though still inside base “Dang, did one survive this time, how could command send 6 hornets in 6 minutes and they all end up the same”

Shows a pile of hornets on fire.

Chan “Hey, one of those pilots is still alive”

Hornets explode some more

Chan “Still Alive”

Banshee attacks and bombs the pile.

Chan “…was alive”

Kane “shotty his helmet!...is it any good?”

Lynxh (walks over to the pile)“Nah”

Kane “Drat… well...need some cheering up...oi Chan! Stay still”

Chan “OK!”

You see Kane shooting

Chan “…ow” (He’s offscreen)

Newman “So…who’s the guy up there”

Guido “he is the uhhhh (whispered) kind of team manager u might say”

Chan and Lynch come down, as Jax goes up to guard position

Guido “And this is our specialist Lance Corporal Chan”

Newman “Sir!....Specialist of what?”

Guido “Just Specialist”

Chan “I have a job!....and it’s important, just the kind of importance, that it doesn’t matter… if I don’t do it…”

Lynch is in background humping dead pilot corpse

Guido “And that’s private Lynch, our team’s medic, learnt that resuscitation method in Italy…” they all stare off at Lynch humping the body

Newman “That guy has a metal spike stuck through his head and is missing part of him.”

Guido “We have a very unlucky success rate…let’s go inside.” (Guido, Chan and Newman walk into the base)

Guido “Uh...it’s not much but it’s home, actually, it’s really not much (starts almost muttering)…kinda cavernous, and squashy really, (snaps back) right, those two there are Shaq and Alex, our Sniper and technician.”

Newman “Hey”

Shaq “Pleasures ours new guy, always happy to add another member to the pack”

Alex “…Yea, welcome aboard, and incase you haven’t realized yet, this is the fuckin nuthouse of the galaxy.”

Shaq “Woh, don’t be so bring down infront of the newguy.”

Alex “May as well stop his dreams and aspirations now, before all his hopes a crushed, and shouldn’t you be on guard duty?”

Guido, Chan and Newman have been moving up as the convo goes on, now being up the top with Kane. Alex and Lynch are coming up behind them, and Shaq has walked off.

Guido “Yea…yea, well Newman this is Kane.”

Newman “Hey”

Kane “Hey soldier.”

Chan “Wait, so you’re our Noob….ha, Noob, where’d that word come from?”

Chan gets shot by Wraith (Shot misses but throws him)

Kane “oh Great, Lynch check he’s ok, Guido be prepared to call for another replacement.”

Lynch “Don’t bother, he’s ok.”

Chan (Vomits)

Alex “what? Are we under attack?”

Lynch “no he’s just vomiting five bucks if he drowns in it”

Newman “Aren’t you meant to be helping him?”

Lynch “Meh.”

Chan “Oh god, it’s in the suit (Vomits again)…It’s…everywhere.”

Jax (on Kanes radio) “Hey, sir, the enemy are attacking.”

Kane “No Shit Sherlock, are you and Shaq ok?”

Jax “Yea, we just hid in a ….(whispering is heard) Cave where we had to fight off hordes of enemies for the good of the human race”

Kane “Good work, now grab a warthog and come over,

Jax “I think he fell for it (whispering heard) yea I turned my radio off (whispering heard) oh….shi-”

Kane “this is the perfect opportunity to enact plan ‘Split into 3 groups of 4, 1 a distraction, 1 cover and protection, whilst the other sneaks into the Alien base and steals the data holding the location to their home world.’”

Newman “Uh….that’s an awfully long name, and I haven’t been briefed on what I’m meant to do for it”

Kane “It has to be long, otherwise how would we know what’s in it, plus the name acts as a briefing.”

Newman “couldn’t you just tell us?”

Kane “no, that would be stupid. And it would take too long.”

Newman “oh, because the name’s so much shorter.”

Kane “Precisely, and don’t u dare play smart ass with me boy.”

Newman “well, your plan doesn’t make much sense”

Kane “the plan makes perfect sense, you just don’t get it cause you’re the newguy!”

Chan [who has stopped vomiting] “actually sir, I believe his name is new MAN.”

Kane “what the hell are you doing up? (punches him, Chan falls over… and starts vomiting again). Alex, take Newman with you, let’s move out lads!”