User talk:Doomchicken/Battle of Reach (Doomchicken)

Well, there are a number of issues with the article and it's barely cleared the ground I'm afraid. One of these issues is that the Battle for Reach started on July the 24th when WINTER CONTINGENCY is declared, not June the 12th as is stated in the article, nor did it continue into February 2553; Reach had already been lost and most, if not all, UNSC ground forces left on Reach had been decimated come September (there was an isolated engagement on Reach during September, but as this is the result of time travel, should not be counted, plus Reach was already declared lost by that point). Another thing is the amount of Covenant ships involved during the Battle of Reach was approximately seven-hundred and fifty, not the one-hundred and forty four that is stated in the article. Furthermore, Reach had twenty Orbital Defence Platforms, not forty eight. Then there's the fact that the UNSC sent a hundred and fifty-two, not two-hundred and twenty nine. While the UNSC Commanders in the article may have played a part in the Battle for Reach, the pre-existing ones are not mentioned, nor is Rho 'Barutamee as a Covenant Shipmaster. Finally, yes, the Covenant did win, but it was a Pyrrhic victory, not the complete dominance that is implied in the article. The UNSC had the strategic victory, though I won't bore you with the details.

I'd love to say that with some effort, this could be a good article, but what little there is unfortunately doesn't fill me with much hope. Nevertheless, if you fix the issues (which may require some cloning from Halopedia, but that's perfectly okay) and do some work, this could very well end up as an excellent canon expansion article. DR 21:25, November 18, 2013 (UTC)