Talk:Halo: Spiritual Veil

I will comment on your story here if you don't mind. It's very good, sounds like a novel. No spelling or grammer mistakes that I could find. During dialogue you should start a new paragraph when ever a different character starts speaking (I can give you an example if you need it.) Thats the advice I can give for now. Great job! --IndigoWolf 00:30, 12 June 2008 (UTC) (aka Zarra 'Yairum)