Talk:Dysisan Republic

While I like the overall feel of the article, there are a number of points I'd like to discuss. All-in-all, I like it. Auguststorm1945 (Talk ) 01:21, August 5, 2015 (UTC)
 * The article refers to the system being colonized in 2390, but does not specify which planet was settled first. Minor, but I'm interested. In addition, the section "Colonial Beginnings" notes that Dysisa III "alone" has, in 2450, a population of 48 million, up from "the original 10 million"; were the 10 million original settlers landed on Dysisa III? On a different planet? Were all three planets colonized simultaneously, and the 10 million divided between them? (I'd avoid the last one, mostly due to the strain a triple planetary settlement operation would place on limited colonial resources, especially when colonizing one planet at a time would avoid said strain. Up to you, though.)
 * The quote template is an easy addition. As much as I like the quote (profit, drills, and heart disease), I feel slightly let down by the lack of heart disease related content in the article. I'm not saying it needs its own section, but a minor addition would be nice.
 * The article loosely describes the worlds of the Dysisa System as outer colonies (see the source of the above quote), though the article's entry on the RP:Ignition page is more definitive. If the Dysisa colonies are outer colonies, they are among the first to be settled . Just making note of it.
 * The Republic declares its independence in 2540, and is able to peacefully secede from the Unified Earth Government. This, to me, is somewhat dubious. In 2540, the United Nations Space Command still has significant resources available, and would be highly unlikely to allow a populous and resource-rich trio of colonies to break away. I'd recommend jumping it forward about a decade to 2550 or even to 2551, when the UNSC would be less likely to embark on a costly campaign to keep the Dysisa colonies part of the UEG. I believe it would be far more plausible.
 * Related to the above, in 2552, the UNSC spent over 2,000 lives and 25 ships to defend a single colony of 17 million residents (Sigma Octanus IV) from the Covenant. The likelihood of the UNSC abandoning the Dysisa system - with its natural resources and significant human population - is extremely low, especially in 2540.
 * The flag, which is great, has a boar, a sword, and four stars, all on a shield. While not at all necessary, a brief mention or explanation of the flag could be a nice addition to the article.