User talk:Oblivious troll/Justin Wolfblood

En Cee Effed
Good day there. I did a quick once through of your page to get the most glaring grammar issues, as per your request: you should use a word processor like Microsoft Word or Google Documents to write. Upon reading your page, I am afraid I came across a few unfortunate instances of unrealism and illogicality as per the Not Canon Friendly Policy. They are as follows:


 * 1) If Justin grew up on Harvest, then he would have been evacuated in 2525 with Staff Sergeant Johnson and the CMA Militia who were holding the Brutes at bay to evacuate as many as they could. There were no Elites or Hunters on this initial raid. There were also no UNSC warships in orbit to provide an evacuation Pelican, just as there were no orphanages left on Harvest at this time that would take him, due to the likhood of the culling of humans on the planet.
 * 2) Why would he shoot at aliens with his father's weapon, when his father is far more capable to attempt to defend his family? He also has no chance of success against the number and type of enemies listed, due to the power of a civilian firearm and the lack of training of the user.
 * 3) Given his phycological condition, by 2534 when he came to age for admission into the Marine Corps, he would fail phychological testing and be reject and excluded for a period of time.
 * 4) Given the above, he would never be given SPARTAN-IV Augumentations.

My reccomendation is as follows for all points above:
 * 1) Place Justin on somewhere else besides Harvest, Remove mentions to seven-year olds and shooting many aliens and living. Rewrite for a more stable upbringing, where he would not immediately fail UNSCMC phycological tests.

In essence, I propose an entire rewrite as nessisary to satisfy the Halo Fan Fiction Wikia's expectation of the fufilling of the Canon Policy.

Have a nice day.

Rainbow Dash http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/halo/images/8/8f/Rainbow_Dash.png (Talk) (Contribs) 23:54, May 12, 2013 (UTC)